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Choosing your words carefully

Increasing prose quality by decreasing word repetition : Article : Nature
Cheryl Strauss of the Department of Human Genetics, Emory University School of Medicine, writes:

'Increase' and 'decrease' are serviceable English words, so why is it my mission to winnow them from the prose that I edit daily? As a technical editor in a university department, I do not demand poetry from my writers; scientific accuracy and logical flow are paramount. Nevertheless, I long for an occasional fresh alternative to 'increasing' and 'decreasing' quantities, measurements and all manner of other too-familiar turns of phrase.
Must mice always have 'a decreased tail length'? I admire the professionalism that refrains from a description of 'adorable, stumpy little mouse tails', but what is wrong with 'shorter tails'? It saves two words for writers tearing their hair out over journals' word counts, and is no less precise. 'Fluoresce' is a lovely word, so why ruin its inherent lyricism with a dull 'increase'? Try 'brighter' fluorescence occasionally, or even 'more intense'.
I challenge all scientific authors: search your documents and count how often you use these two simple words, not forgetting permutations such as 'increasing' and 'increased'. You may be surprised at how frequently they rear their heads.
If so, I urge you to seek a remedy. There are times when only an increase or a decrease will do. Make those times count, and use the full expanse of the English language to broaden your prose elsewhere. Sheer repetition is anaesthetizing, and the aim (one hopes) is to keep the reader awake as well as informed. Strive for accuracy, logic and truth; but in matters of style, simple variety is a welcome spice.
From Nature 446, 725 (2007).

Posted by Maxine Clarke on April 18, 2007
Categories: Writing | | Comments (1)

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And for this short and simple letter, The Department has run me off (all the way to Mexico, no less -- literally).
I will always be grateful to the fine minds of Nature editors. A force for sanity!
Best to you all,
Cheryl

Posted by: Cheryl Strauss | April 23, 2007 05:05 AM

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